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Incomplete Pass

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Incomplete Pass
« on: January 23, 2011, 02:32:03 AM »
Hi all, another story for you here, I hope you enjoy it!
Definitely fun to write this one, and I just love giving stuff back to the community.
as always, comments are encouraged and appreciated. i got a few more of these in the can, I'll keep kicking them out if you keep reading them

Peace, love and a good catfight,.
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Incomplete Pass


  It was Halloween night and the band RokMonster had just put on another incredible performance, blowing up the Palace Theater for two and a half hours in front of 9,000 deliriously screaming fans. The crowd had left sweat soaked and satisfied.
  Well, most of the crowd. The entrance outside that led to the backstage area was full of fans that were extremely anxious to get a chance to meet, hang out with, drink with, and quite possibly screw one of their musical heroes.

  But backstage passes were damn hard to come by, and Mike, the doorkeeper to paradise, only had one left. He surveyed the frothing crowd and smiled. He really liked his job. Part of the fun was seeing what he could get these desperate skanks to do just to get back there. Needless to say he had had his fair share of knob slobs and all the free drugs he could ever want.

  And it was Halloween; this one should be a good score

  “OK EVERYBODY” he yelled over the din, “I ONLY GOT ONE MORE OF THESE! WHO WANTS TO PARTY WITH ROKMONSTER TONIGHT HUH?”
  The crowd went berserk, but two girls went more berserk than the others and shoved their way out of the fray first, both of them lunging for the laminated ticket to heaven.

“MINE!” yelled a girl with jet black hair streaked with dyed blonde, who was dressed up as the naughtiest nurse you could imagine. She was 22, about 5’7”, and thin, but with a huge pair of 42D tits that stuck straight out and up. She was sporting a red and white outfit that was cut halfway up her midriff and a white microskirt that stopped just south of her ass. She had on white fishnets and a red pair of Chuck Taylors. Her name was Molly and she had been up front all night making goo goo eyes at the guitar player, and she was SURE he was looking right back at her.

“MINE!” yelled a girl with dirty blonde hair. She was 21 and decked out as a naughty schoolgirl. White shirt tied in a knot just below her well rounded pair of 36C breasts and above a flat stomach. She was 5’8” and it seemed like all of it was leg, as her plaid miniskirt showed off her awesome toned gams. She was wearing argyle knee socks and a pair of Adidas’s. She was Daphne, and she was SURE the guitar player had been staring at her in the second row ALL night long.

They both grabbed the laminate in Mike’s hand at the same time.
And stared hate daggers at one another.
“HEY YOU FUCKING SLUT, GIMMIE THAT!” The blonde screamed.
“FUCK YOU BITCH, LET GO!” The black haired girl growled.
“NO WAY SKANK! I’VE BEEN TRYING TO GET BACK THERE FOREVER, AND THAT HOT GUITAR PLAYER IS GOING TO BE MINE TONIGHT!” Daphne yelled.
“YOURS???? YOU BLONDE BIMBO! HE’S MINE, HE WAS EYE FUCKING ME ALL NIGHT!” Molly yelled like a woman scorned.
Keeping one hand latched on the pass, they simultaneously let loose screams of hate and reached for each others’ hair.

“HEY!” Mike yelled and yanked the pass away from both of the screaming hell cats.
“I don’t care which one of you gets this girls, it’s all the same to me. But I’ve only got one, so settle it amongst yourselves and get back to me, OK?”
He stood back, smiled, and got ready to watch the fun.

The two girls circled one another with nails flexing, hissing at one another.
“Fuck you, you ugly skank, you’re not even worth a lay, give it to me and I won’t humiliate you in front of all these people, last fucking chance slut!” Daphne said.
“Me Ugly? You stupid blonde bimbos, you’re all the same. You’re a walking STD and I’m not gonna let you give MY guitar player one of those! I can smell it on you from here slut.” Shot back Molly.
That was it, the blonde lunged at the black haired girl and they locked together, trying to tear each other’s hair out, spinning in a circle.
Dyed black and dirty blonde tresses started to fall to the ground.
Releasing one hand, Molly began to swing wildly at Daphne, connecting with her boobs and finally scoring with a hard uppercut to the chin.
The blonde released her hair hold, and stumbled back, the black haired girl in hot pursuit.
Falling over her own two feet because she was half drunk, Daphne fell to the ground and Molly fell over her in the process. They immediately clawed onto one another and began rolling on the ground, trying to kick one another as they scrapped.
Molly was starting to get the better of the schoolgirl, and one of her thrashing knees connected up her skirt, directly into her pubic mound. She took the opportunity to mount her rival and sent a few punches to the thrashing girls face. The Nurse grabbed one of Daphne’s kicking legs and brought it over with her left arm, working the half leg split while the crowd ogled the schoolgirls panty covered crotch.
“GIVE UP SLUT!” She demanded.
“NO, FUCK YOU, LEMMIE GO!” came the response.
Molly theatrically rolled her eyes and looked at Mike, “GIMMIE THE PASS” She yelled.
“She didn’t submit yet. No pass” He drawled.
“DAMN YOU!” She said to anybody in earshot, and sent a vicious karate chop to Daphnes womanhood.
The blonde howled, and managed to kick the black haired nurse in the side of the head with her free leg, connecting with the temple. Molly released her hold and fell to the side as her world went gray momentarily. Daphne scrambled away, massaging her hurt pussy.
She saw the black haired nurse starting to clear the cobwebs, and leapt to her feet, sending a sneaker into the girls exposed midsection. The air went out of Molly with a *whoosh* and she collapsed to the ground. “SO YOU LIKE MY PUSSY, HUH BITCH?” She yelled, and sent a hard sneaker from behind her hurting enemy, connecting between Molly’s fishnet clad legs.
 As the black haired girl screamed, Daphne, yanked her to her feet by her top and twirled her around by the fabric, spinning her in circles before sending her stumbling to the spectators, who sent the nurse back into the fray. Her top was ripped and her huge tits were hanging loose, which the naughty schoolgirl immediately latched onto with both hands; squeezing and tearing at the huge globes with everything she had. Molly sobbed as it felt as if her boobs were going to be torn from her chest, and she pawed at the blonde’s hands ineffectually.
“GIMME THE PASS BITCH, OR THESE ARE COMING OFF! I’LL GIVE THEM TO MY MAN AS SUVENIERS!” Daphne snarled.
“OHHH GOOOD NOO! NOOOO! FUUUCK YOOOOU BITCH!” was Molly’s reply.
Daphne let go with her right hand and punched the black haired girl in the face several times. The nurse was starting to bleed from her mouth, and her eyes went glassy. Daphne wanted to finish this bitch off and get laid, so she sent a series of knees into the nurse’s pussy and then punched her in the belly as hard as she could.
Molly went totally limp in her foe’s grasp.
Daphne let her fall to the dirty ground and turned to Mike, striking a hot pose, hands on hips and cocked her head. “Now, about my pass” she said.
“Nope. I don’t think she’s quite done yet” Mike said.
The schoolgirl’s eyes went wide with anger and she turned to make this brunette nurse skank give for once and for all…
..and was met with a right cross directly to her chin, knocking her to the ground senseless.
Then a follow up kick directly to her face, smashing her lips against her teeth. Blood began to run from the blonde schoolgirl’s mouth.
“I’VE HAD IT WITH YOU TRAMP BIMBO!” Molly sneered. “I’M GONNA END THIS FOR ONCE AND FOR ALL.” And she spread the girls argyle sock clad legs and viciously stomped her pussy a dozen or so times. Then she reached down and removed Daphne’s half shirt, waving it around and throwing it into the cheering crowd.
This was a better damn show than the concert, Mike thought.
Standing on Daphne’s splayed dirty blonde hair; Molly reached down and grabbed her boobs. Then she brutally pulled UP for all she was worth, making the schoolgirl cry in agony as she arched her back to try to avoid the pain. She kept this up for a minute or so, finally releasing the blonde to lay on the dirty ground, sobbing in the spilled beer and cigarette butts.
“MY PASS SLUT?” The nurse asked.
“N…O…OO….FUCK YOU, FUCK YOU!” The naughty schoolgirl gasped.
Rolling her eyes again, Molly asked the crowd, “WHO WANTS TO SEE SOME SKANKY BLONDE SCHOOLGIRL PUSSY TONIGHT?!”
The response seemed to indicate positive.
Still standing on the blonde’s hair, effectively immobilizing her, Molly reached down again, this time, working her way under the plaid skirt, hiking it up past the girl’s thighs. She reached in and grabbed Daphne’s panties and pulled them off, exposing her pussy for everybody to see.
Holding the black satin garment like a trophy, she said “I’M GONNA GIVE THIS TO MY MAN BACKSTAGE MYSELF!” and she tucked them into the waistband of her microskirt.
She then reached down and laughed. “OH, WE’RE NOT EVEN A REAL BLONDE. WHAT A STUPID BITCH YOU ARE!” noting that the meekly struggling Daphne had a thatch of brown pubic hair. “Well, tramp, nobody will know once I’m done with it.” The brutal nurse reached down, grabbed a handful, and PULLLED up with all she had, ripping it out and then throwing the pubic hair into the crowd. She repeated this brutal maneuver twice more until the schoolgirl was just about bald.
 Daphne could only sob in pain and humiliation.
“ONE MORE TIME?” Molly asked. When nobody said “No” she reached down and this time grabbed the blonde by her clit and pulled her up the same way. So violent was the move onlookers swore it was stretched a few inches, and the schoolgirl’s ass and luscious legs were pulled off the ground. She kicked her feet ineffectively and howled.
“MY PASS?” The victorious nurse purred. “MY PASS OR I RIP YOUR CLIT OFF SLUT!”
“No…please…stop...OOOOOOOOHH GOD  PLEEEEASE STOPPPP! YOU WIN IT’S YOURS PLEEEEEEEEEEASE STOPP!” The defeated blonde finally tearfully conceded.
 “YOU BET IT IS WHORE. SHOULD HAVE JUST GIVEN IT TO THE BETTER WOMAN IN THE FIRST PLACE. “
“Yes, you’re the better woman, please stop” Daphne whimpered.
“DAMN FUCKING, RIGHT I AM” and she let the poor, battered girl’s clit go. The beaten naughty schoolgirl just lay on the dirty, beer spilled ground, sobbing piteously.
Stomping her rival one last time in the belly and pubic area, Molly moved off her now even dirtier blonde hair and Daphne curled into a fetal position.
“GET THE FUCK OUT OF HERE” the naughty nurse sneered and kicked at the beaten blonde schoolgirl until she got up and ran through the crowd, holding her destroyed pussy in one hand. The assembled mass laughed at her as she pushed her way through, groping, mocking, and poking at her.
Molly raised her arms in triumph to the cheers of the crowd, and turned around to get her reward.
Only to see Mike the doorman giving HER pass to a smoking hot redhead dressed up as a devil. She had a hand down his pants and was giving him a handjob as he opened the door and led her in.
He stopped for a moment and looked back at Molly.
“Good fight. Nice try, but uh…this one seems to want it more. Better luck next time”
And the backstage door closed behind him.

Backstage, Chris Zephyr, the lead guitar player for RokMonster, sighed and did a huge line of coke off the mirror on the table in front of him in his dressing room.
He closed his eyes as the warmth hit his brain like a blast of air, took a swig off his bottle of Bacardi, and mused that he needed to be more proactive with Mike about who he wanted backstage. The platinum blonde chick dressed up as Alice In Wonderland he has chosen out of the sad, desperate, horny girls who had been assembled for the bands amusement this night was easy enough on the eyes, and he had no doubt she would satisfy his needs when he was ready for her.
But dammit, he had been totally checking out this dirty blonde haired naughty schoolgirl in the second row ALL night…
« Last Edit: January 23, 2011, 09:36:31 PM by harpua13 »
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Offline Brit_Brat1

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Re: Incomplete Pass
« Reply #1 on: January 23, 2011, 12:50:06 PM »
Hi,

Like your writing and your themes.

Would be nice to see spaces between the paragraphs in the earlier part of the story which would break it up a bit.

Reference to schoolgirls put me off a bit as it implies "under age". Maybe college girls as an alternative?

Look forward to being able to read more stories from you in the future :)

Brit

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Offline levi

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Re: Incomplete Pass
« Reply #2 on: January 23, 2011, 04:49:13 PM »
loved the story pal!!
keep it up!!
to brit brat, if you read the story you could see that it was halloween and he describes the ages of the fighters as 21 and 22.

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Offline Brit_Brat1

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Re: Incomplete Pass
« Reply #3 on: January 23, 2011, 05:43:20 PM »
Er um are you saying I did not read the story? :)

Yes I can fully see the ages of the fighters.......... still say the vocabulary school girl leaves a nasty taste in my mouth,,,,,,,, but hey maybe thats just me and my preferences.

Brit

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Offline harpua13

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Re: Incomplete Pass
« Reply #4 on: January 23, 2011, 09:33:55 PM »
I need to check my formatting when I preview, when I wrote it out in word there were paragraph breaks exactly where they should have been and where you noted. that annoys me too, sorry about that, but it's easily fixed.

Brit, you know I don't want to offend, the costume is a fairly common one nowadays, I see ladies like 40 dressed up like that often. To me it's an easy way to get a character into a short skirt and a pair of cute knee socks.
You may want to avoid my next one, both combatants are pointedly 18 and consenting adults, but they're in the same type of outfit/fantasy.
after that everything else I got avoids that whole side of things because I don't want to be in a rut. the story I have on page 2 (Fantasy Reality) is more along the lines of the rest of my work, I imagine you'd enjoy it more.  
Thanks so much for the feedback though!
 
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Offline koolswan

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Re: Incomplete Pass
« Reply #5 on: January 29, 2011, 12:07:32 PM »
good one with a twist in the end...enjoyed it!

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Re: Incomplete Pass
« Reply #6 on: January 31, 2011, 11:56:40 PM »
And here I thought this was going to be about Jay Cutler... if nobody gets that joke, I'm gonna feel pretty dumb. Anyway, I'm been using my phone and I'm glad I've got my laptop for a little while to catch on replying to these wonderful stories. I love the way you incorporated the concert atmosphere into your stories... you're extremely creative and it's an honor reading your work.
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Re: Incomplete Pass
« Reply #7 on: February 01, 2011, 01:42:28 AM »
And here I thought this was going to be about Jay Cutler...

My brother-in-law is a Bears fan, so to him that's fightin' words.  On the other hand ... I thought it was very funny.

Btw, GREAT story!  Going to do a search to see what else you wrote.

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Re: Incomplete Pass
« Reply #8 on: February 02, 2011, 11:33:22 AM »
Cutler would have quit with the first kick to the mangina.  :D
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Re: Incomplete Pass
« Reply #9 on: October 31, 2011, 06:59:10 AM »
Happy Halloween everybody!
For ladies dressed up like slutty nurses and schoolgirls everywhere.
 :D
« Last Edit: October 31, 2011, 07:01:57 AM by harpua13 »
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Re: Incomplete Pass
« Reply #10 on: April 04, 2015, 03:41:54 AM »
Fantastic story. Please write more!

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Offline SunnyB

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Re: Incomplete Pass
« Reply #11 on: April 04, 2015, 11:00:09 AM »
Ha! Ha! What a cruel twist there with Molly winning, but not getting in ...  ;D :D ;)
Proudly butch and living as a 'man'. In this catfight fantasy there are no losers, and in the end all should be winners!

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Re: Incomplete Pass
« Reply #12 on: November 02, 2015, 03:46:38 AM »
Happy belated Halloween everybody!

I haven't upped this one in ages, one of my very first stories and I hope you enjoy it if you've never read it!
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