[yaye]

Great story like all of yours.
A nicely constructed build up taking us to a really tough fight, with both girls going at it to the very end.

I only feel it needs one last text between Natsumi and Chiemi, to give us the loser side of the after-fight.

And now I am also curious about your first ending and what new direcctions make you change it.

Thanks for such a wonderful tale.

[justlooking9000]

Thank you for the comments. Regrettably this story left me exhausted for quite a while, but I intend to keep building on the series.

Yaye: Usually I portray a defiant loser who isn't willing to accept she lost a dirty catfight in front of her man and vows to get even in an even more vicious rematch. Since the basic principle in this catfight universe is that there are 'no' rematches under normal circumstances, I couldn't really portray Natsumi as willing to to tangle against Mayumi again over Seiji . All an extra text from Natsumi to Chiemi would have done in my mind is to portray utter desolation and sadness. After all she did, it must be heart breaking to imagine her ex boyfriend with another woman.

[deity17313]

hey just9000 what made you choose a 9day/ multiple day format for your story?

[justlooking9000]

Because I wanted to build up the tension and hatred between the girls before the final day. One thing is to know you have a romantic rival over the man you want but never seeing her frequently. Another thing is to live with the man you love and your sexual rival under the same roof and watching her using her trying to seduce him in front of you. It's a concept that appeals to me.

If the question really was why nine days instead of say 5 or 10, it's because I ran out of ways to do more days. Believe me, if I could have written 20 days of them being catty and mean while the tried to sway Seiji's affections towards them I would have.